Descriptive Writing

Today, for our writing lesson Miss B told us that when we write descriptions we need to learn how to add detail to support our statements.  She taught us how to do that today.  Our topic was 'Going to the Doctor'.  We all know about doctors so this was an easy topic to write about.  After each sentence we had to think about some more information that we could add to explain what we said.  This is our combined effort:

Going to the Doctors

It's important to go to the doctor when you're feeling sick.

Before you go to the doctor, call them first for an appointment.  It's important to call them so that they know you are coming.

Sometimes when you visit the doctor you feel scared or nervous because the doctor might give you an injection or he may give you disgusting medicine to drink.

The doctor's clinic smells clean and fresh but it feels cold.  Doctors keep their work places clean so that there are no germs that can make us sicker.


We could have added more information in our writing.  What other things should we mention about a visit to the doctor?